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Old Poem
ok, i was tidying my room (believe it or not
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is blood thirsty.
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Re: Old Poem
"i looked at you
something stirred inside i wished that i could reach you but i would tarnish your pride" I love that so much. It actually is really good. Pain, yearning and defiance. I like it how you're so into this person, but you understand how self-centred they are. It's great. Good work Kat!! |
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Re: Old Poem
thanks leesa
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Re: Old Poem
Pretty pretty good Kat
I like it!!lol, you said "bear in mind i was only 15, reasonable attempt" You had 15 just a couple weeks ago ![]() |
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Re: Old Poem
^lol, true, well id only just turned 15 at the time, haha
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Re: Old Poem
good poem. Nice.
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