my poem...

[nellymany]

Some poem that I wrote 6 months ago when I just got into the hospital...

When you tell me that
everything will be alright,
do you mean it ?
When you tell me that
everything will be okay
can you feel it?
You always promise
You always trust
But try to relex
Cuz I can't follow your lines.

Everything is changin' around me
and I feel like I'm all stuck
I feel like I have nothing to do,
nothing to say,
nothing but find a better way.

I tried, I really did
I wanna do every lil thing.
Wanna shine again in the empty sky
Wanna reach the moon by the night.

So give me your wings
and we will fly so high
fly into the sky.
Through everything in the middle I'll fight
I wanna get it
And get into your heart !


so what do ya'll think ?

[nenevhng]

Your poem shows easally your emotions,we can almost understand,what you were going through in that hospital.
The closing walls,the growing tedium and the will to breack free and run.
But you didn't wanted to run,what you really wanted,was to fly,and dream a new real world.
I hope you finally got your wings,
(somehow,i believe someone delivered it to you).

[Nelly Fan]

yeah, you used really emotive language, its really good, nice work on it

[Leesa]

that really made me smile and go all warm and fuzzy inside, it was definitely special for me to read.
i hope youre doin well neL.
x

[INKY]

Short, sweet and straight to the point. I like it.
It really shows the fear and doubt people will have when there are in a situation like that.